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_________________________________________________________________________________________________ [S]CC: Novel ►► The Hellhound of Billion (FANFIC)  _________________________________________________________________________________________________ Novel Title: The Hellhound of Billion (FANFIC) (Status: COMPLETED) Genres: Action, Sci-fi, Drama _________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Story Synopsis: _________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Brandon was in charge of investigating the appearance of necrolyzed dogs in Billion. Little did he know that these beasts would involve him in an unresolved cycle of revenge and endanger his well-being. Related Fanfics: _________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Side Story: Feat Characters: _________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Fanfic Link: _________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ The Hellhound of Billion(Read Here) _________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Rating: Teen (13+) Original Creator: The_Biologist Number of Chapters/Volumes: 10 chapters Last Update: August 12, 2016 (COMPLETED) Entry by: The_Biologist  |
The_BiologistNov 29, 2016 3:10 AM
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| Of course there's no problem, I'll change it myself once it's done :D |
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| That sure is an awesome cover! The color is especially great. Since now I can look at it more thoroughly now... 1. The color of the guns. Brandon wields the red and the white simultaneously, so I think best if you keep the color red and white. 2. Charles' head feels too big? Well, that's all! Thanks for the amazing cover! |
| The version with illustrations (only old ch1 right now) can be found at AO3 here: http://archiveofourown.org/works/5805190/chapters/13379641 I also plan to start a thread at Creative Corner when some of the new illus are up. :) Link to Creative Corner thread. |
The_BiologistDec 11, 2016 12:25 AM
| So I only read two chapters, but I figured I should write my thoughts before my brain shuts down for the night. Since this is a fanfic, the writing style is inevitably different from an original work, ain't it? -w- I don't know Gungrave, but I feel like I need to watch it in order to understand what's going on here. If you want it to do better as a stand-alone, I'd suggest clarifying the storyworld a little bit. I mean, yes, it's important to open with some form of tension (BELIEVE me, I know), but for some reason, I imagined the first scene in a 1930's setting. I have NO idea why, now that I think about it; why would a parking lot even exist in the 30's, lol. But back to my point, yeah, since I'm not familiar with this series, I don't know who Brandon or Mika is. I don't know anyone's relationships with each other so just saying their names wasn't enough for me. I honestly thought Mika was his wife or something until the grocery shopping thing. And on that topic, you have a really elegant writing style, so that was the most elegant shopping trip I've ever read. (y) But yeah, once again, because I don't know this storyworld, I don't know why they're casually grocery shopping when crazy killer dogs are on the loose. I mean, I guess it's the calm before the storm, sure, but I didn't think a serious work like this would have an SoL-like moment. It was a nice touch for an SoL fan like me, but I worry that that became a source of criticism for you. I don't know if I have a character limit but since I like to ramble, I'll cut this short by saying I like the foil Mika serves. Brandon clearly has a lot of thoughts so it's good that she exists to simplify the direction in his life a bit. But because of that, I smell SO MANY death flags, like good God, I'm terrified. Crushing dog heads was already too gorey for me, like whoa. |
| @kazane2: Thanks for taking your time to review. :) Uh, character limit exists? I'm not even aware of that! But really, be as rambly as possible. Good point about the lack of clarification of the setting and Brandon's and Mika's relationship. I'll find a way to edit those in (after finishing my case report). Thanks for the note! As for the SoL, I think it's been a bad habit of mine. It often stems from my attempt to show the duality of Brandon's character: the enforcer and the homebody. Once again, thanks for the review! |
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